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Tom Perry concentrated hard. The rocket competition would begin shortly. He had never lost a contest, but that didn’t calm him. Being on top counted, and he pushed himself to remain there.
The other kids, however, rarely came over to him. No way was he going to let them ignore that he’d win again. Still, he often wondered: why didn’t winning make people like him better?
He opened his toolbox and began assembling (组装) his launch pad. Then he checked his rocket again. It looked perfect -especially compared to the others.
But one caught his eye. A thin boy named Ed lifted it carefully. Its paint shone in the sunlight, and its parts fit perfectly. His critical eye detected that this rocket could beat his.
“Nice rocket,” said the boy nervously. “Thanks,” Tom replied flatly, and then regretted it. “Where do you usually launch it? I’ve never seen you here.”“In the field behind my house.”
“You don’t care for these contests?”
“I never really thought about them. I keep pretty much to myself.”
The announcer explained the competition. Tom barely listened, his gaze constantly drifting to Ed’s rocket. Suddenly his heart did a leap – as Ed lifted the rocket to place it on the launch pad, his fin (翼) had caught against something, pulling it away from the fuselage(机身)一 not enough to break it off, just enough to loosen it.
But Ed hadn’t noticed. He glanced back at Tom and gave a thumbs-up. Tom felt a surge of guilt but decided he wasn’t going to say anything. Anyway, it was up to Ed to keep checking his rocket.
Then the competition began. Most rockets gained respectable heights, while a few shot wildly. Tom watched, but the knowledge he had about what was wrong with their rockets soured within him. It was like something he had stolen.
“Ed Malovich will be our next contestant,” the announcer said, interrupting Tom’s daydream. Immediately Ed
lifted his rocket and headed to the launch area.

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Without thinking, words flowed from Tom’s mouth, surprising even himself. Without thingking anything, he pointed out that Ed’s fin had caught against something, pulling it away from the fuselage, which was not enough to break it off. just enough to loosen it. Hearing Tom’s anxious words, Ed checked his rocket, repairing the fin enough to break off. With a surge of delighted passing acrossing his face, Ed approached Tom with a brilliant smile like a blossomed flower. Ed said “Thank you” in a soft but excited voice. Hearing his word, a sense of warmth flashed in Tom’s heart.

Minutes later, Ed’s rocket blasted (轰鸣)skyward, shooting up as if unstoppable. The audience was caturing by Ed’s rocket. Causepanlse fulfilled the whole room. After the competition. “The winner is…” Announcer announced dramatically “Ed” Hearing the news, Tom was so sorrow that he was almost crying. But after a minute. he felt a hand was touching his head. It was Ed, he said, “Don be sad. without your help. I can’t be the winner, Could you be my friend?” At the moment. Tom realize it is a thing that is more signifiant than the result of he competition, it is the friendship.

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Without thinking, words flowed from Tom’s mouth, surprising even himself. Without thinking, he pointed out that Ed’s fin had caught against something, pulling it away from the fuselage—not enough to break it off, but just enough to loosen it. Hearing Tom’s anxious words, Ed checked his rocket and repaired the fin so it would not break off. With a surge of delight passing across his face, Ed approached Tom with a brilliant smile like a blossomed flower. Ed said, “Thank you,” in a soft but excited voice. Hearing his words, a sense of warmth flashed in Tom’s heart.

Minutes later, Ed’s rocket blasted skyward, shooting up as if unstoppable. The audience was captivated by Ed’s rocket. Applause filled the whole room. After the competition, the announcer announced dramatically, “The winner is… Ed!” Hearing the news, Tom was so sorrowful that he was almost crying. But after a minute, he felt a hand touching his head. It was Ed, who said, “Don’t be sad. Without your help, I cannot be the winner. Could you be my friend?” At that moment, Tom realized that there was something more significant than the result of the competition—it was the friendship.